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In this scene from Nineteen Hundred (under revision) life is not going too well for our heroine.
Kathryn trekked back to the boarding house, blind to the still lovely afternoon and the people enjoying the weather; blind to the white clouds streaming in the pale blue sky, the geese marching in formation honking away, the sun reflecting off the lake.
She barely heard a mother call her son. “Magnus! Where are you now?”
The woman laughed as she hunted for the boy.
But laughter had no place in Kathryn’s world at the moment.
Lovely depiction of her desolation with the situation. I am so sorry for her. Such a disappointment. Excellent writing, though, Sue.
yeah you feel for them more than I do
It reads like poetry. Very good. She’s isolated in a colorful world, which is living and breathing around her, almost like it’s suffocating her. Really nice six!
Your comments are like poetry. I really appreciate them.
Aw, so sad. Nice six!
yes is sad
Awesome discription, her desolation fairly bounces off the ‘page’.
thanks very much – appreciate it Sherry
I feel so badly for her. You did an excellent job in conjuring that emotion from your readers. Also, lovely scene setting with the beauty of the day sharply contrasting her sadness. It’s something we’ve all experienced at one time or another, which makes it easy to relate to. This was a great six!
thanks very much – one day last year we took a walk in the park – and this is what I heard and saw, so just incorporated it into this
Uh-oh, what happened? Great description!
can’t tell
Very interesting scene! Can’t wait to see what happens next
you’ll have to buy the story …
Wow, I don’t know what happened, but you painted her emotions beautifully. All of the wonder of the world is lost to her now. That is a serious sadness seeping into her life. Written poetically, Sue.
yes, it is pretty serious. Am working n a poem for this
Your descriptions really set the scene….very sorrowful…I feel horrible for her.
she thanks you for that
Strong emotive six, l could see her walking through that park lost in thought.
well at that point she was just angry
Wonderful depiction of her mind set. Great work.
thanks very much
But, but…everything was going so well. Whatever happened it was awful. I can feel it.
Aw – she can’t talk about it
Hi Sue! That’s beautiful and heart-wrenching. There’s so much emotion bubbling away here – is it published? If not, it should be.
this week *fingers crossed*
Very poignant moment
thanks Angela
Oh dear. What’s wrong? Poor Kathryn! You’ve explained her feelings beautifully.
thanks and can’t tell you lol
Poor Kathryn. Something’s definitely on her mind.
thanks JC
The story is flowing very nicely. You caught my sympathy here.
yes thanks it’s just about done
Gosh, this sounds so ominous, and you paint such a heartbreaking picture of her loneliness… Great job!
It gets worse lol
This provides such great juxtaposition between her emotions and the scenery. (Sorry I was away yesterday–I’m just now getting caught up with my 6SS rounds.)
You know I love it
Paints such a picture in my head! Well done!