Six Sentence Sunday May 20


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.

 

In this scene from Nineteen Hundred (under revision) life is not going too well for our heroine.

 

Kathryn trekked back to the boarding house, blind to the still lovely afternoon and the people enjoying the weather; blind to the white clouds streaming in the pale blue sky, the geese marching in formation honking away, the sun reflecting off the lake.

She barely heard a mother call her son. “Magnus! Where are you now?”

The woman laughed as she hunted for the boy.

But laughter had no place in Kathryn’s world at the moment.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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39 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday May 20

  1. Jenna Jaxon says:

    Lovely depiction of her desolation with the situation. I am so sorry for her. Such a disappointment. Excellent writing, though, Sue.

  2. Wildcat's Wife says:

    It reads like poetry. Very good. She’s isolated in a colorful world, which is living and breathing around her, almost like it’s suffocating her. Really nice six!

  3. Jessica Subject says:

    Aw, so sad. Nice six! :)

  4. Sherry Gloag says:

    Awesome discription, her desolation fairly bounces off the ‘page’.

  5. Mae Clair says:

    I feel so badly for her. You did an excellent job in conjuring that emotion from your readers. Also, lovely scene setting with the beauty of the day sharply contrasting her sadness. It’s something we’ve all experienced at one time or another, which makes it easy to relate to. This was a great six!

    • Sue says:

      thanks very much – one day last year we took a walk in the park – and this is what I heard and saw, so just incorporated it into this

  6. Uh-oh, what happened? Great description! :)

  7. Very interesting scene! Can’t wait to see what happens next :-)

  8. Wow, I don’t know what happened, but you painted her emotions beautifully. All of the wonder of the world is lost to her now. That is a serious sadness seeping into her life. Written poetically, Sue.

  9. Your descriptions really set the scene….very sorrowful…I feel horrible for her.

  10. Gemma Parkes says:

    Strong emotive six, l could see her walking through that park lost in thought.

  11. Cate Masters says:

    Wonderful depiction of her mind set. Great work.

  12. Gem says:

    But, but…everything was going so well. Whatever happened it was awful. I can feel it. :(

  13. susanroebuck says:

    Hi Sue! That’s beautiful and heart-wrenching. There’s so much emotion bubbling away here – is it published? If not, it should be.

  14. Very poignant moment

  15. Kate Warren says:

    Oh dear. What’s wrong? Poor Kathryn! You’ve explained her feelings beautifully.

  16. J.C. Martin says:

    Poor Kathryn. Something’s definitely on her mind.

  17. The story is flowing very nicely. You caught my sympathy here. :)

  18. Zee Monodee says:

    Gosh, this sounds so ominous, and you paint such a heartbreaking picture of her loneliness… Great job!

  19. Silver James says:

    This provides such great juxtaposition between her emotions and the scenery. (Sorry I was away yesterday–I’m just now getting caught up with my 6SS rounds.)

  20. You know I love it ;)

  21. mselene says:

    Paints such a picture in my head! Well done! :D

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