When her faith had died
she hoped he would not fail her
but as time went on
**
their life continued
his voice like a trumpet’s blare
sent out warning notes
**
her heart drummed loudly
she wondered if he was true
one more chance she gave
**
watchful eyes waited
she sensed his interest fade
taut violin strings
**
time passed so slowly
his flute shrilled piercing her soul
powerless she wept
**
luck found her at last
The time had come to leave him
when her faith had died
**
written for
Blogophilia Week 48.5 topic: Where Faith Dies, There is Always Hope
Bonus Points:
(Hard, 2pts):Use the same sentence as a first and last line
(Easy, 1pt):Include 2 musical instruments
Six verse Hakai. Nice tension on the final stanza lines. .
I had no idea what to do this week. And I dislike rhyming – after I spoke to a friend I based my blog on her situation. I hope if she sees this she won’t be mad…
Some lovely Haiku, though… It is one of my favorite poetic forms. Hope you are feeling better!
I didn’t know that… yes I think I am thanks
awww… no way am I mad – it’s beautiful!
I love the part about his voice like a trumpet sounded out warnings.
“When her faith had died” is so appropriate in so many ways.
Thank you for this.
yeah unfortunatly it does work eh?
Wow! Haikus filled with an orchestra! so many instruments you used! 8 points Earthling!
hmm appears so – the instruments was a good prompt for this
A sad story, gritty and real. Can only hope for better.
thank you very much for that. Yes we are hoping for better
So moving and a beautiful form!
muchly appreciated, thank you
Magnificent, and your haikus paint a picture of a sad situation, such heartbreak. Sometimes we must nearly drown in emotion before we make necessary changes! Well done!
thank you Colleen. Lori is working to fix it. She’s my muse
sad and beautiful!
thank you
I love haiku and you did very well with the prompts. Beautifully sad!
Michelle K
thanks very much Michelle
very passionate indeed Sue… a lot of heart wrenching indeed… relationships are hard to chisel into your life… faith being the mainstay for many of us girl…. beautiful Haiku Sue… very thought provoking indeed … a great picture too… love it Sue… xxx
well Lori is my muse and you helped teach me to find good pics
I just love haiku’s. This was a great set of haiku’s.
–Diana
Very nice
I love how you told a story through them, rather than having 6 stand alone haikus
nice flow