Six Sentence Sunday May 15


It’s time again for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by!

I appreciate all your comments as they have helped in the development of these characters.

Last week he had just told her what he does and who he works for. This snippet is actually something I’ve cut from the original but works well here

Hearing him spin this load of rubbish she glared at him; how stupid does he think I am?

She didn’t know if he was giving her a line or what. 

He sat comfortably at ease with no evidence that he wasn’t telling the truth; but then, she thought, if he really did work for the devil, he wouldn’t have a ‘tell’ to show he was lying.

 Oh my goodness!

 Do I believe him then?

She thought about his story some more and could think of no other explanation for the glimmer of light she had seen.

 

 

 

 

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43 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday May 15

  1. Lindsay says:

    Sounds like she’s having a problem trying to believe him or not. Come on, would someone really admit the worked for Mr.D if they didn’t. Then again, she could pass the glimmer of light off as a solar flare.
    This six really opens up so many questions. Great job.

  2. Gem Sivad says:

    Devil’s henchman or not, this man is fascinating. Your characters are pulling me back each week to read more. Great snippet. I want more.

  3. I like this! Great character insight!

  4. J.C. Martin says:

    Hmm…mysterious man who may work for the Devil. Intriguing. 🙂

    “Hearing him spin this load of rubbish she glared at him” may need a bit of revising as it reads a bit like a run-on sentence. Perhaps “She glared at him” would suffice?

  5. Very descriptive, interesting writing. Great voice.

  6. This is such an interesting story!

  7. Zee Monodee says:

    ‘work for the devil’? Now that’s intriguing!

  8. I wonder what the truth is as well. He is obviously different. Great six!

  9. Graylin Fox says:

    A mystery man with a great poker face. Love it!

  10. jayel kaye says:

    I’d be having trouble beleiving him too but then somebody has to work for Mr. D. He can’t do it all by himself.

  11. Good job. I’m very interesting in seeing this story develop.

    Best,
    Allure

  12. Cate Masters says:

    Oo, an outtake! Very cool. 🙂 Thanks for the peek behind the scenes.

  13. I like this! I always hate it when the heroine just automatically believes this stuff because people wouldn’t really. If you told someone that their first reaction would be “Quit kidding!”

  14. Great…build up our curiosity and leave us hanging. *lol* Looking forward to finding out more about our mystery man.

  15. Lynne Murray says:

    I think she’s got a valid, real world reaction–wondering if he thinks she’s gullible. On the other hand, what kind of proof would a girl want to ask for from…uh, the Devil’s employee? Intriguing six!

  16. J.A. Beard says:

    Yeah, that definitely sounds like a guy she needs to be careful around.

  17. It’s not something I’d really want to believe in either 🙂

  18. Liana Brooks says:

    In her shoes I’d be a bit confused too.
    I love reading deleted scenes, they always add something to the final polished novel.

  19. What a quandary! Would she expect someone who really worked for the devil to be a truthful person? But then, why would he make up such a lie?

  20. I don’t blame her for being wary in that situation. Nice six.

  21. bluerose says:

    yes, very real. I’d have a hard time too, if someone told me he worked for the devil. ;]

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