Six Sentence Sunday July 10


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers! And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by!

I’m open to comments on the blurb below. I’ve never written one

From The Devil’s Mistress. An example of his attentiveness

One morning at breakfast I was trying to eat and speak at the same time; yes, I’m a sloppy eater.

While I was in the middle of a sentence, he said,                       

            “You have toast crumbs on your cheek.”

 He took his napkin, reached over  and gently wiped them away.

His touch was as soft as a caress and his smile told me the gesture was not one of judgment but one of love.

             “Thank you. No one has ever done that for me before.”

They are just an ordinary couple. With one difference.

She’s a librarian, with a track record of bad choices in men; becoming dissatisfied and bitter. Playing by the rules and practicing common sense has not brought her love.

He was just doing his job. Going about his business just like he had for the last century. Until they meet and the dreams he never knew he had came true.

They meet at the scene of  an apparently mundane  vehicle accident.  He tells her he works as part of a mid- management team for the Devil. His job saps him of what little humanity he has left.

He  attracts her more than any man she’d ever known; and fulfills her every dream. Almost. She is dating a man feared by the world. Can she keep his secret?

 She attracts him more than any woman he’d met in the last several decades. But he must balance his boss’s demands and not lose her in the process.

 They each risk everything on love; all they want is to be together.

She’s certainly not going to leave him. The sex is hot and he’s never boring 

You can’t help who you fall in love with.

 A girl’s gotta do, what a girl’s gotta do.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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44 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday July 10

  1. Lindsay says:

    It’s nice to see he does have a gentle side.

  2. Really great six! 🙂

  3. hmm, but what will he do to void that gesture? Nice 6!

  4. Gem Sivad says:

    Absolutely wonderful. I love your blurb too… A girl’s gotta do…” yep.

  5. jennajaxon says:

    I’m beginning to wonder if he’s going to show his “devilish” side. At least toward her. No one keeps his cool all the time. Bet sparks will fly if he does! Devilishly sweet six.

  6. Zee Monodee says:

    Very sweet scene, especially considering who he is.

  7. Jc Martin says:

    Sweet scene. I like your blurb. Intriguing premise. 🙂

  8. Lynne Murray says:

    I love the gentleness and the couple’s sense of valuing each other. One thing I can’t restrain myself from saying about the blurb–before using the word “ordinary” you might consider putting in something about the dangerous part of the relationship in the very first sentence–something like “They had a heavenly relationship, but his job put a devil of a strain on it.” Sorry, I’m a compulsive blurber….

  9. Suzie Quint says:

    Intriguing concept. It sounds like a lot of fun.

  10. Paula Martin says:

    A very tender moment. Love it.

  11. Lauri J Owen says:

    How sweet! I love tenderness between two people. Nicely done.

  12. I’m a messy eater too, and I think that’s very romantic. 🙂

    For the blurb, I would leave out the sentence about meeting at the scene of the accident. I think it reads better w/o that, but only my opinion.

  13. What a lovely scene, cute and very romantic 🙂 Fab six xx

  14. Bree Younger says:

    Sweet and lovely scene!

  15. How sweet of him! Wonder if his dark side ever shows. Nice!

  16. J.A. Beard says:

    Very sweet, extra sweet considering who he is.

  17. Very sweet. Great job.

    Best,
    Allure Van Sanz

  18. Xakara says:

    What a lovely gesture–to contrast whatever comes after. 🙂

    ~Xakara
    Dawn’s Early Light 6SS

  19. This book sounds fantastic! Great premise! Can;t wait to see if they can work out their differences!

  20. jay di meo says:

    Very tender gesture. NIce six!

  21. sue says:

    Thank you for reading

  22. bluerose says:

    the gesture was not one of judgement – it’s so nice to have someone you can feel secure around and be yourself.

  23. Okay, that’s hilarious… the devil’s minion wiping crumbs from her cheek 😀

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