Six Sentence Sunday August 14

Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers! And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by!

Carrying on with my set of stories which start in the 50s. Six teens, seemingly very different, meet weekly and keep in touch with each other their entire lives. They must have something in common.

Each character starts with a line or two of a glimpse into their home life as they  leave to meet with friends.

Well three characters down and three to go. Then I’ll either have to go back to my Devil (which is not coming along) or actually start to write this one.


“Mama, I’ll see you later.” 

Frowning, and with a  sharp note in her voice, she said, “Y’all  goin’ out with those people again,” more of a statement than a question. 

Shocked, he peered around the table at the staff from the school paper, Scooped, and it slowly dawned on him that his was the only complexion whose colour matched the chocolates that someone had brought.        

“OK,” the teacher- advisor, Mrs. Tate, asked, “what stories should we follow this month for the paper?”

Charles slowly lifted his arm, brought it back down, chewed his lower lip, gazed at the ceiling, and firmly raised his hand again.













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48 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday August 14

  1. Aimee Laine says:

    Statements as questions — a very common ‘action’ of southern mamas. And they are just as much meant as questions … and statements, too. 😉

  2. Marie Dees says:

    Nicely done six. Love the Southern feel.

  3. Liz Culver says:

    I like how this is coming together with snippets of these people. Interesting six.

  4. Alix says:

    Great six, with loads of underground tension coming through. You have me totally wanting more. Thank you.

  5. Gem Sivad says:

    Bringing the threads together. It’s pulling me deeper into the story each week. Well done!

  6. Nice job! Good feeling of time here 🙂

  7. Interesting exploration of character.

  8. jennajaxon says:

    Love how these are all playing out. Each character is so different, with very different voices. I did have a question–in the 50s would Charles have been allowed to attend a school with white children? It may depend on how far south you’re setting this. Great six!

    • sassyspeaks says:

      I added a comment here – takes place in the north – but very astute observation – as always – on your part. Now Jenna – while each character is very different – they do have a psychological factor in common.

      • jennajaxon says:

        I went back and read all the other snippets again–they seem to all be “loners” or “misfits” by society’s standards. But I’m not sure about a psychological factor, though that lonliness may play into it. But you know them better than me! 🙂 Can’t wait to read more!

  9. Zee Monodee says:

    Loved the characterization here. Good job!

  10. Sue says:

    Note: – Mama’s from the south. They live in the north now

  11. Paula Martin says:

    Liked his indecision before he raised his hand. Interesting six.

  12. J.A. Beard says:

    Interesting how all these different characters are so distinct. It’s going to make for a very rich plot tapestry.

  13. Great six. LIke the way you’ve shown his indecision. 🙂

  14. These excerpts reveal so much of the character, in their home life and elsewhere. A great idea!

  15. Lindsay says:

    You can feel his frustration. Great six

  16. eveedwards01 says:

    Ohh, Mama doesn’t sound happy! And poor Charles–we can feel his anxious tension. Great six!

  17. Bree Younger says:

    Great setup!! Can’t wait for more!

  18. Lynne Murray says:

    Intriguing group of character, especially for the 1950s when all their issues would have been perceived differently. I went to integrated schools in Alaska in the 1950s (very far north–LOL!), but we heard reports from the Little Rock, Ark. riots over integration on the radio. The way that people from different ethnic backgrounds socialized (or didn’t) then was different than now.

  19. Love that Southern accent! I was surprised to read (in comments) that this takes place in the North. Loved the snippet anyhow. (I was raised in the South too.)

  20. epbeaumont says:

    Sharp and vivid voices here; with the accent and intonation comes a sense of atmosphere, the one we carry with us no matter how far we travel from home ground.

  21. Vivien Dean says:

    An interesting ensemble is being shown here. Well done!

  22. You’re reminding us how scary those times were for some people. This is going to make a fantastic book.

  23. bluerose says:

    You’re really doing a wonderful job of revealing so much about these characters in 6 sentences!

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