Six Sentence Sunday August 21

Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers! And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by!

Carrying on with my set of stories which start in the 50s. Six teens, seemingly very different, meet weekly and keep in touch with each other their entire lives. They must have something in common.

Each character starts with a line or two of a glimpse into their home life as they  leave to meet with friends. 

They might meet in a place something like this.










He left the apartment and double checked that the door was locked. There was no one to say good bye to. Both his parents were at work.

Jose reported for his bus boy duties at the restaurant near the university on time, as always.

“I’m finished; take this away.”

As the plate was shoved into his face, Jose grimaced in disgust and thought that the guy could have at least said ‘please’.

Dios Mio what these college kids leave over of their meals would feed a family of four back home.





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43 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday August 21

  1. Lindsay says:

    Interesting. Looks like he’s not to happy with the college kids and their waste. Not to mention their manners.

  2. Lisa Fox says:

    College kids are a handful.

  3. Gem Sivad says:

    Nice set up. A lot of info in these six.

  4. Ooo very interesting six!

    And hello to a fellow ‘nuck :)!

  5. Zee Monodee says:

    You’ve sktched him so well – Jose’s character comes across really well even in as short as this excerpt. Good job!

  6. Both parts make me want to give Jose a great big hug.

    And yes, you are just down the road. Too cool! 🙂

  7. Paula Martin says:

    Jose obviously has better manners than the college kids. Good six!

  8. At least he’s polite 🙂

  9. Aimee Laine says:

    I personally couldn’t be a waitress. Nope. Too much lack of consideration. 🙂

  10. You”ve created some very interesting characters. I’m wondering what’s going to happen when they all get together. Very nice.

  11. Vivien Dean says:

    The more I read about these characters, the more I want. Thanks for sharing!

  12. bluerose says:

    Muy bueno, mi amiga!

  13. jennajaxon says:

    Sue, you have a gift for these six sentence character sketches. I can always see the character clearly, with very few words. Marvelous focus. Wonderful six as usual.

  14. epbeaumont says:

    Nice details, with all sorts of hints about who he is and where he comes from… and yes, this gives me flashbacks to waiting and bussing tables (not my happiest job)…

  15. J.A. Beard says:

    A good insight into socio-economic disparity in a very compact and engaging way.

  16. Bree Younger says:

    I love where this is going. Great character.

  17. Looks like Jose’s life may need a change…Wonder what’s in store for him? Nice Six!

  18. Hi, Sue!

    As always, you pack a lot into your six… I think out of all of them, this one comes across the clearest for me 🙂 Great job!

    …oh, you might want to put a comma after ‘Dios Mio’… I had to read that line a couple of times before I got it 🙂

    • Sue says:

      thanks – I wonder why this came across the clearest? and I thought I did have a comma…. oh well – thanks for pointing it out 😀

  19. Fab snippet… i’m hooked in and wanting to know what happens next xx

  20. Sue says:

    Thank you JoAnne – you may have to wait a while….

  21. Lynne Murray says:

    Poor kid, literally, but hardworking and with integrity. Hope he meaks it out of the jaws of poverty, as he seems to have potential. Excellent six!

  22. Sue says:

    Thank you very much Lynne 😀 and yes he does, but how is the story

  23. I really enjoy these! Just thought I’d mention that 😉

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