Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday
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Carrying on with my set of stories which start in the 50s. Six teens, seemingly very different, meet weekly and keep in touch with each other their entire lives. They must have something in common.
Each character starts with a line or two of a glimpse into their home life as they leave to meet with friends.
They might meet in a place something like this.
He left the apartment and double checked that the door was locked. There was no one to say good bye to. Both his parents were at work.
Jose reported for his bus boy duties at the restaurant near the university on time, as always.
“I’m finished; take this away.”
As the plate was shoved into his face, Jose grimaced in disgust and thought that the guy could have at least said ‘please’.
Dios Mio what these college kids leave over of their meals would feed a family of four back home.
sassyspeaks 
Interesting. Looks like he’s not to happy with the college kids and their waste. Not to mention their manners.
true. Jose may not have much but his mama has taught him to be polite and not to waste anything. Thank you
College kids are a handful.
Yes they are – thanks Lisa
Nice set up. A lot of info in these six.
thank you very much. I’ve really had to focus on these six. Someday will have to write more than six 😀
He’s right.
Yeah I know – thanks for the visit
Ooo very interesting six!
And hello to a fellow ‘nuck :)!
thanks Angela – yeah we have to stick together lol
You’ve sktched him so well – Jose’s character comes across really well even in as short as this excerpt. Good job!
I guess the method to my madness works – thank you so much, really apprciate your comment
Both parts make me want to give Jose a great big hug.
And yes, you are just down the road. Too cool! 🙂
yeah you’re right – do wanna hug him. But then I wanna hug all six of them – thanks a lot
Jose obviously has better manners than the college kids. Good six!
thank you Pauls yes he has
At least he’s polite 🙂
but the college kids aren’t …
I personally couldn’t be a waitress. Nope. Too much lack of consideration. 🙂
funny you should mention waitress…
You”ve created some very interesting characters. I’m wondering what’s going to happen when they all get together. Very nice.
Well the chapter I just wrote they are together – but will be individual stories Thank you very much
The more I read about these characters, the more I want. Thanks for sharing!
well they’re my side project – some day… thanks very much
Muy bueno, mi amiga!
Merci bien ma bonne aimee 😀
Sue, you have a gift for these six sentence character sketches. I can always see the character clearly, with very few words. Marvelous focus. Wonderful six as usual.
Much appreciated. I never knew I could do this – but what if I have to write more than six???
Nice details, with all sorts of hints about who he is and where he comes from… and yes, this gives me flashbacks to waiting and bussing tables (not my happiest job)…
thank you very much – I’ve never done that job – it doesn’t sound the greatest. Apprciate your comment
A good insight into socio-economic disparity in a very compact and engaging way.
Thank you for the lovely comment. And yes, that’s the point I wanted to make
I love where this is going. Great character.
thanks very much!
Looks like Jose’s life may need a change…Wonder what’s in store for him? Nice Six!
You’ll never guess 😀
Hi, Sue!
As always, you pack a lot into your six… I think out of all of them, this one comes across the clearest for me 🙂 Great job!
…oh, you might want to put a comma after ‘Dios Mio’… I had to read that line a couple of times before I got it 🙂
thanks – I wonder why this came across the clearest? and I thought I did have a comma…. oh well – thanks for pointing it out 😀
Fab snippet… i’m hooked in and wanting to know what happens next xx
Thank you JoAnne – you may have to wait a while….
Poor kid, literally, but hardworking and with integrity. Hope he meaks it out of the jaws of poverty, as he seems to have potential. Excellent six!
Thank you very much Lynne 😀 and yes he does, but how is the story
I really enjoy these! Just thought I’d mention that 😉