Six Sentence Sunday November 20


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers! And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by!

From my untitled WIP The stories start in the 50s. Six teens, seemingly very different, meet weekly and keep in touch with each other their entire lives. They must have something in common.

Last wewek we heard from Gene about his new job.

Today we tackle Caroles’ point of view.

 

Patting her hair, Carole informed the group, “I let my hair go curly again. That straightener goop gave me too many split ends, so I guess I’ll just have to get used to curly hair.”

“Yeah I noticed,” Gene said, “and that green blouse goes great with your red hair.”

Carole smiled at Gene and continued with her thought, “My mother is so happy.”

The others chuckled in understanding at Carole’s hair and mother problems.

The paper straw lay crumpled and twisted in her hands.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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34 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday November 20

  1. jennajaxon says:

    Love the last sentence! So telling of her, yet thrown in almost as an afterthought. So clever and well done, Sue! These six are dynamite!

  2. Zee Monodee says:

    Curly red hair? Sounds like she’ll be a little spitfire 🙂

  3. As a person with curly red hair, I really enjoyed the way she talked about it.

  4. Gem Sivad says:

    Mother problems everyone can relate to and the less obvious angst displayed by the twisted straw. Well done!

  5. Nina Pierce says:

    I’m enjoying these characters.

  6. I’m glad they seem to be gelling so well 🙂

  7. That last line about the straw is well done! Almost thrown in as an afterthought, but a great insight into her internal emotions.

  8. These are fabulous insights into your characters! Another well done six! 🙂

  9. Aimee Laine says:

    It’s the ‘grass is greener’ problem. ‘Cause it never is!

  10. Guilie says:

    Interesting idea, six friendships forged early on and surviving the passage of time. I like it, and I look forward to getting to know your characters better.

  11. Alix Cameron says:

    I love the pace and description. Well done.

  12. Cherie Marks says:

    Carole feels very relatable and real. Great six.

  13. As always the look into these characters’ lives is so realistic. The personal details you spin about each person makes them real, which is what makes reading your sixes so enjoyable.

  14. Lynne Murray says:

    Interesting relationship between these two as well as with the group and their families–lots of tension and questions to be answered on several fronts!

  15. J.A. Beard says:

    I like the interaction, but also the subtle hints of the complexity of emotions.

  16. Of nice! I love how the straw wrapper reveals her true feelings on it! 😀

  17. gayleramage says:

    Can really picture her in my head. Great snippet. 😀

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