six sentence sunday November 27

Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by!

Taking a break from the six characters for a bit. I’ve been working on the Devil’s Mistress.

One dreary Sunday having just watched a re-run of Buffy, she kiddingly asks him if he’s ever dated a vampire. He replies in the affirmative.

“I met Alicia one night when I was walking down a dark alley on my way back from a job. It was just a space between two old tenement buildings, the bricks weathered with age, amidst fumes of cabbage, urine and drink. My ears picked up the scampering of rats, their nails clacking on the pavement. I did not anticipate seeing any mortals in this place. No sounds alerted me, but to my surprise an unique scent penetrated my awareness. I was not alone and it was not mortal.”

The Devil’s Mistress, a paranormal romance, is about an unlucky in love woman and a man who works in mid-management for the Devil. He’s the one who dispatches souls to his boss, Mr. D. She vows to restore her lover’s humanity and not lose him in the process. The story is told entirely from her point of view.






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42 Responses to six sentence sunday November 27

  1. Great six! 😀

    “fumes of cabbage, urine and drink.” – loved that description!

  2. Jenna Jaxon says:

    I love this story too. The description in this passage is especially evocative. I can see him walking down that alley like I was watching a movie. Great six, Sue. 🙂

  3. The description really brought me into the moment.

  4. Zee Monodee says:

    Oooh, love that you came back to this one too! It always amazes me how you weave in so much detail from the five senses in his POV – knocks my breath away! 🙂

  5. Great descriptive passage! 🙂

  6. Gem Sivad says:

    Great way to make him seem “human” at the same time demonstrating that he’s not. Wonderful six!

  7. Meg Maguire says:

    I agree about making him sound human—though the way he speaks marks him as superhumanly eloquent, all those sensory details make him accessible. Great six!

  8. I got the chills when you talked about the rats. Great six! 🙂

  9. Way to set the scene with your description! Wish I could’ve read more. Awesome 6!!!

  10. Guilie says:

    This sounds exciting, Sue–thanks for sharing! I hope you share more of these in the future 😀 Thanks for the visit to my blog–yes, I agree! These Sunday e-mixers are fantastic in terms of cultural exchange and meeting different people. I love “different” 😀 Have a fantastic rest of the day!

  11. Alix Cameron says:

    I was right there. Great work.

  12. Vivien Dean says:

    Good description! Thanks for sharing.

  13. I love your use of description and your last sentence is a great hook.

  14. Cherie Marks says:

    Great description. So evocative of smell and sight. Great six!

  15. Jayel Kaye says:

    Well, ok then. Scary six. Got me very interested.

  16. Lynne Murray says:

    Not very romantic meeting– but that’s just as well considering is talking about old girlfriend to his current girlfriend. If he is any common sense at all new girlfriend has to win this contest! A very atmospheric–but fun–six!

  17. Gayle Ramage says:

    I love the description of the alley. Could really picture it. 🙂

  18. Sue says:

    thank you very much!

  19. A dank, dark alley…what a romantic place to meet someone! 😉 Well written imagery, and I like how he can smell her out, and know that she is not mortal.

  20. E. Jamie says:

    Fantastic description!

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