Six Sentence Sunday February 26


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.

 

A year already? It’s been wonderful meeting so many of you, reading your stories and receiving your feedback on mine. Thank you 😀 I’m so glad I joined this writing community!

 

This week I am sharing Nineteen Hundred my first historical short story.

 

The right love, the wrong time
 

Miss Kathryn St. Clair lifted her red velvet skirt, descended the stairs, Oh it smells so good down there, and upon hearing the clock in the foyer chime eight o’clock walked faster, finally reaching the normally dingy and dark breakfast area to find it transformed into an elegant dining room.

As the landlady lifted the spoon to dole out the aromatic  soup, cream of leak if Kathryn could believe her nose, a man dashed in, smelling of the cold and rubbing his hands to warm them.  Smiling in apology, his eyes acknowledged the rest of the diners and he sat in the last empty chair.

“My regrets, work kept me late.”

Mrs. Hodgson nodded in his direction, and said, “Welcome Mr. Thomas. Everyone this is our newest resident, Mr. Gideon Thomas, who has taken over Mr. Jackson’s room.”

 

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57 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday February 26

  1. Debra S. says:

    Okay, now I’m hungry again and tonight is the perfect night for soup. Thanks for sharing. Have a great weekend.

  2. Heather Boyd says:

    Nice six. Great descriptions.

  3. Ruthie says:

    Ooh, a boardinghouse historical? I don’t think I’ve ever seen that. Intriguing! Great six. (It’s “leek” soup, though.) 🙂

  4. Gem Sivad says:

    Great introduction of characters. I like it already.

  5. I agree, nice intro of the characters!

  6. jennajaxon says:

    Great introduction to the story. You have a knack for making the characters vivid in just a few words. Can’t wait to read more. 🙂

  7. Very nice description…enjoyed your six

  8. D'Ann Linscott-Dunham says:

    A lot of description! Good job!

  9. Zee Monodee says:

    Nice intro into the story – love the picture you depict here 🙂

  10. Cara Bristol says:

    Nice detail. You put me in the boardinghouse.

  11. Cherie Marks says:

    Mmmmm…I’m suddenly very hungry. Very descriptive six!

  12. KE Saxon says:

    I love how you build the atmosphere of the boarding house and the action really puts me in the moment there. Great six! What a wonderful storyline.

  13. Cate Masters says:

    Wonderful intro to an intriguing world.

  14. Sounds like it’ll be an interesting book 🙂

  15. Carrie-Anne says:

    Great introduction to the story and characters, and I love the idea of a story set in a boarding house.

  16. Leaves me wondering the background stories of all of the characters mentioned. 🙂

  17. Ah-ha! I think our hero just made his entrance!

  18. J.C. Martin says:

    Soup. Yum. Love the historical feel of the piece, and great accompanying picture!

  19. “Smelling of the cold” is a small detail, but it really brings me into this story. Great atmosphere!

  20. Ryan says:

    Nice set up and interesting characters!

  21. Alix Cameron says:

    Fantastic concept and wonderful six! Looking forward to reading more!

  22. JoAnn Ross says:

    I really like this. A boarding house takes the small town atmosphere and narrows the canvas even more. It’s an intriguing concept and a great way to layer characters, showing how they relate differently to different people, adding in the fact that they’re living with people they might never choose to interact with so closely.

  23. Lynne Murray says:

    Great sensory details to draw us into the scene, the setting and the characters. Fun six!

  24. Nick Kelly says:

    Very good details, and the formality of the dialog really sets the tone. Cool snippet.

  25. Your description is fantastic, though I feel like there may be a few run-ons. Doesn’t take away from the great introduction.

  26. Sue says:

    true – the first is a run on – wanted to see if I could do it 😀

  27. Gayle Ramage says:

    I love historicals! Definitely, definitely back next week to read more and see where this story is going. 🙂

  28. J.A. Beard says:

    Very atmospheric!

    Sorry I haven’t been commenting lately. I kind of got overwhelmed by my book release, and now am trying to catch up on things!

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