Flash fiction for Blogophilia 1.5

Mac looked around the yard He  shuffled his feet  and drummed his fingers on the front of his jean clad  leg.  The cigarette smoke from the other men wafted over to tickle his nose. He heard their boots scraping against the concrete. 

Where is Ed? They had agreed to meet to discuss their arrangement.

 “Hey Mac.”

 “There you are. We don’t have much time.”

The outdoor exercise area was the only place they could speak directly  since they lived at opposite ends of the building.

“Not to worry. If we think off center and always do whatever’s next, we should be okay. The biggest hurdle will be getting across the river or we could go the extra mile around it. But going across would be better.”

They each tried to picture what they could remember of the terrain outside the walls. It had been a long time. Mac stood,  hands dangling  in front of him, his thumbs playing hide and seek;  his calluses felt like sand paper.

Ed could taste his fear. Or  maybe it was just  the sting of  adrenalin that thinking about their  course of action produced.

They planned to break out of the prison in two days


I’ve been participating in various flash fiction challenges lately so here is another of exactly  200 words.



Written for

Blogophilia 1.5 Topic: “Going the Extra Mile”

 Bonus Points:

(Hard, 2pts): include a dream symbol  – river

(Easy, 1pt): include a George Carlin quote(s)

Think off center and  always do whatever’s next


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29 Responses to Flash fiction for Blogophilia 1.5

  1. Marvin Martian says:

    8 points Earthling! 🙂 I always think off center! To focus would be painful for my brain which is in the seat of my pants! I am a pantser remember!

  2. trev says:

    great story Sue… and I loved the way you weaved in the challenge words brilliantly…
    you got so much in for only 200 words ….. amazing… xxx

  3. Feathered Pen says:

    LOL! That video is one of my favorites of George Carlin’s ! Ed and Mac, having been in jail surely know how to live without much stuff. Perhaps the cure for shopaholics is to spend some time in jail,lol!Well done on the 200-word challenge and the use of prompts!

  4. Lisa Kessler says:

    Great work Sue!!! 🙂

    And I love that George Carlin clip!!! I miss him…

    Lisa 🙂

  5. Liam says:

    prison break!! great post

  6. Chazz says:

    you kno what would suck if the burbs were built up just out of sight of the prison LOL

  7. joaniethewriter says:

    Who knows what progress will be found outside of the walls…. They may not be so happy once they are out. Nothing will be the way it was….I wonder if the grass will be greener?

  8. LETA says:

    I was all prepared with something to say but then read through the comments and when I reached David’s comment, I just laughed and my thoughts went out the window!! *shakes head*

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