Six Sentence Sunday March 4


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.

 

Last week we were introduced to two of the lodgers in Mrs. Hodgson’s boarding house from my first historical short story, Nineteen Hundred.

 

The right love, the wrong time
 

Miss St Clair peeked under her lids to inspect the newest resident. He appeared younger than the rest of the group, perhaps a few year older than her twenty five years. He did not miss her surveillance; his brown eyes twinkled back at her blue ones. She quickly averted her eyes to concentrate on her clasped hands sitting in her lap.

During the meal she couldn’t help but notice how the gas lamps played with the shadows on Mr. Thomas’ face. Depending on the angle, sometimes his eyes appeared shadowed and hidden, and at other times the light shone on his brown hair almost bestowing a halo effect.

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40 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday March 4

  1. Oh, I love the effect candlelight can give. Nice six! 🙂

  2. Heather Boyd says:

    Intriguing six. I look forward to reading more soon. *hint*

  3. Gem Sivad says:

    He definitely has her (and my) attention. Love the description of him in the candle light.

  4. Oh, Sue–I love this. I love that he caught her staring and the play of the gas lamps? Great!

  5. Beautiful descriptions!

  6. Debra Moore says:

    More please! Woohoo!

  7. Cara Bristol says:

    Fun story! Am enjoying your snippets.

  8. Ruthie Knox says:

    Love “how the gas lamps played with the shadows.” I can see him, and now I want to lick him.

  9. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love the descriptions, and how she’s checking him out.

  10. Paula Martin says:

    Great six – love how he caught her looking at him.

  11. Vivien Dean says:

    Very nice description! Thanks for sharing. 🙂

  12. Ooh. Mysterious. Do I sense foreshadowing in her description of him?

  13. Lynne Murray says:

    Great atmosphere and period details! Intriguing six!

  14. I love those first moments of meeting someone interesting. That sizzle of excitement and caution. It’s adorable how she looks at her hands in her lap. How can he resist her after that? 🙂

    • sassyspeaks says:

      Well actually did not make it part of the six – but her hands in lap as Mr. Thomas took over another’s room when the man died so everyone was saying a prayer. You would catch that lol

  15. Siobhan Muir says:

    I liked the hinted setup and am intrigued with her “heavenly” companion. 🙂

  16. Love the looks! One of the funnest times of falling in love… Great descriptions of the gaslight

  17. Zee Monodee says:

    Very nice six! Builds the visual and the tension really well 🙂

  18. Gayle Ramage says:

    Ooh, fantastic snippet!

  19. Liam says:

    Intriguing

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