Six Sentence Sunday April 1


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.

It may be April 1 but no fools in this group! 😀

I thought you may wish to know more about a couple of the side characters. They do not appear in the rest of the story.

Cover by Joleene Naylor

 

Mrs. Hodgson played regularly with the other small landlords in the neighbourhood and held a high degree of expertise in the game of Whist.

She said little and worked her cards skillfully.

When she did speak, she pursed her lips as if a sour pickle had stuck in her throat.

Kathryn enjoyed conversing with Muriel since they had much in common, but it was fortunate that the seamstress’ job did not involve contact with others and she did not have to get up in front of a class to lecture.

Muriel’s voice sounded very high pitched, as if pricked by one of her sewing needles, thus making it uncomfortable to chat with her for any length of time.

Talking to Muriel reduced the distraction of Mr. Thomas, whose presence she was unable to ignore; like a light just outside her peripheral vision, he intruded into her consciousness.

 

 

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44 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday April 1

  1. Love the sour pickle description 🙂

  2. Heather Boyd says:

    Damn that Mr Thomas must be a big distraction. Cannot wait to learn more about him. Nice six.

  3. Zee Monodee says:

    Love how you can pass across little tidbits and observations about the surrounding crowd from your main protag’s POV 🙂

  4. Gem says:

    Fantastic descriptions here. I feel like I’m at the table with them. Great job!

  5. Cara Bristol says:

    A diverse cast of characters.

  6. Kate Warren says:

    I’ve met a few of those sour pickle people. Brilliant descriptions!

  7. KE Saxon says:

    Very descriptive. I love the fact that Muriel’s high-pitched voice makes it “uncomfortable to chat with her for any length of time.” LOL! Very amusing. You paint very vivid pictures with words. Great six!!

  8. Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) says:

    Awesome descriptions! Great six!

  9. Jenna Jaxon says:

    Your character sketches are always fantastic, Sue. I’d like to follow any one of these peripheral characters into their own stories. Why is Muriel so shy and does she overcome it? How did Mrs. Hodgeson get to be so good at cards and how does that affect her life with the other landlords? We won’t even go into Mr. Thomas. I must have more! Brilliant six!

  10. Great character descriptions! love the description of her voice sounding like a needle pricked it and then how Mr. Thomas intrudes on her consciousness…

  11. You’ve done a terrific job of “introducing” the characters with some very vivid descriptive language. Excellent work!

  12. blackmanjm says:

    This is great for world building, really gives us a good look into the world. And that last line is just stellar!

  13. Wildcat's Wife says:

    Haha! I especially loved how you told us about Muriel’s high-pitched voice. That cracked me up. I can just picture this guy checking his watch and wondering when the heck he can he leave.

  14. Sour pickle, sewing needle and light – all great similes! I love that she can’t quite distract herself enough to get her attention off Mr Thomas! 🙂

  15. Carrie-Anne says:

    Very nice descriptions! It makes it easy to picture these characters and what they’re doing.

  16. Cate Masters says:

    Your description put me right at the scene. Great work.

  17. Karyn Good says:

    Very nice six! I enjoyed the description and felt like I had a front row seat.

  18. I love how Mr. Thomas keeps sneaking into her thoughts. 🙂

  19. Alix Cameron says:

    Fantastic description!

  20. Nice voice here. It really evokes the historical era feel when I read it in my head.

  21. I, too, LOVE the sour pickle comparison. And “as if pricked by one of her sewing needles.” You have a great talent for description!

  22. I loved this line:

    She said little and worked her cards skillfully

    Perfect how it says so much, yet leaves enough open for the reader to picture/imagine on their own 🙂

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