Six Sentence Sunday April 8


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.

While editing I came across this snippet which you guys might enjoy. It doesn’t follow from last week but it’s fun, I hope. And I will probably conclude the scene next week.

Cover by Joleene Naylor

 

Set up: Kathryn has just taken a bath and is returning to her room.

 

One evening as she departed the washroom to return to her room, a “Hello” interrupted her trip.

She glanced up straight into Mr. Thomas’ face where a glint flashed in the back of his deep brown eyes and then vanished like a sparkler’s single flicker.

Gulping air, her left hand instinctively pulled her pale green robe more tightly across her bosom.

Her right hand was occupied holding her toiletries.

I hope my belt is tied, she thought, as she shifted from one foot to the other.

He gazed at her, entranced that her hair, freed from the usual bun, looked as beautiful as he had imagined; a blanket of wheat streaming down her back with two wet tendrils of curl resting on her forehead.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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44 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday April 8

  1. Jessica Subject says:

    Oh, I can feel some sexual tension there. 🙂

    • Sue says:

      Thanks Jess. Yes it is true. But she is a very proper young woman in the Victorian era, no sex takes place. In some ways the suggestiveness is more sensual than the actual act.

  2. Wildcat's Wife says:

    What a charming encounter. And, I like you put her in a somewhat vulnerable situation with robe and hair down. Really adds to the scene! The way you describe her hair as “blanket of wheat” — nice!

  3. Kate Warren says:

    I hope her robe is tied too. That line cracked me up. I love the way you write, Sue! Great six!

  4. Cara Bristol says:

    Nice sexual tension. An ‘oh my’ moment.

  5. Zee Monodee says:

    Softly sensual – love the thoughts going on there! 🙂

  6. Paula Martin says:

    Hmm, interesting meeting, charged with electricity between them.

  7. Gemma Parkes says:

    Beautiful and quite sweet!

  8. Nice sexual tension building between these two!

  9. Definitely some sexual tension! Nice! (Sorry I’ve missed you the last couple weeks.)

  10. Lovely six…looking forward to next week!

  11. Silver James says:

    Well done, Sue. Sweet but a bit sensual at the same time. Lots of tension and insight into the characters here!

  12. So sweet! Wonder how he’s going to woo her. 🙂

  13. You’re right–it definitely was enjoyable. Intimate moment here and you portrayed it really well. Lovely.

  14. Cherie Marks says:

    Nice timing on his part. I kinda hope her belt isn’t tied. Great six!

  15. I love how he’s said “hello” to her, getting her to look at and acknowledge him, then her reaction to him. Great sexual tension building between them. 🙂

  16. Vivien Dean says:

    Very cute build on the tension! Thanks for sharing. 🙂

  17. Lynne Murray says:

    Oooh, got to love that post-shower chemistry–hot six!

  18. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love the less-is-more tension between them.

  19. Heather Boyd says:

    Looks like that relationships is progressing nicely. Yes! Great six.

  20. Jenna Jaxon says:

    I so want them to get together and this is a great moment of recognition of each other, even though they “know” each other already. And he took the initiative. Mr. Thomas is a man who knows what he wants, I believe. Love the line about his eyes glinting and then it “vanished like a sparkler’s single flicker.” Beautiful. More, more, more!

  21. Julie Dao says:

    Ooh nice job on the romantic tension! I love the description of her hair.

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  23. “vanished like a sparkler’s single flicker.” – good line!

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