Six Sentence Sunday July 15

Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.


Set up: Gideon and Phoebe have spent some time in the restaurant getting to know each other and now he has suggested they go to her room.

Gideon quietly stood next to Phoebe watching the numbers crawl their way to ’16’, and though she kept peeking up at him, no doubt wondering why he did not even hold her hand, his body did not touch hers.

The sensation when he had placed his hand on her back as they left the restaurant was like coming home.

He picked up a faint odor of worry emanating from Phoebe as well as another passengers’ bitter perfume.

In addition to the two of them, several people had entered the elevator at the lobby level.

He was still old-fashioned in this regard and did not believe in public displays of affection.

However what he planned to do with her once they arrived safely in the suite, could not rightly be called ‘affection.’













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31 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday July 15

  1. Jessica Subject says:

    Sounds like he has some naughty plans for her. 🙂

  2. Heather Boyd says:

    Great place to finish the six… I want the rest. LOL

  3. Carrie Crain says:

    Hey Sue! I’m back from vacation. Gideon sounds cautiously optimistic!! What a gentleman, what a gentleman he is. Swoon!

  4. Kate Warren says:

    “The sensation when he had placed his hand on her back as they left the restaurant was like coming home.” I love this sentence!

  5. Cara Bristol says:

    I do like his voice here…his plans don’t involve “affection.” Great line.

  6. Jenna Jaxon says:

    The “felt like coming home” line is a gem! Perfectly describes his feelings. Love his gentleman-like exterior behavior, and his implied “naughty thoughts” interior. Excellent six!

  7. Mae Clair says:

    I love his old-fashioned morals, even if he is thinking something totally different when they’re alone. Nothing like the ‘perfect gentleman’ who smolders with hot sensuality in private! 🙂

  8. K.E. Saxon says:

    He’s so suave, and yet so naughty, too. Loved this part. Great six!!

  9. Elin Gregory says:

    This is considerate – both for her and the other folk in the elevator. PDAs aren’t always welcome or appropriate. Ten out of ten for Gideon.

  10. oooh, fun times ahead! 🙂

  11. Carrie-Anne says:

    Nice six! Gideon sounds like a great leading man.

  12. Gem Sivad says:

    I like his gentleman guise as he tenses for pleasure soon. Nice.

  13. Frank Fisher says:

    I like the tension set up here and the elevator is the perfect scene for this. Good six!

  14. sue says:

    Thanks very much!

  15. I agree with Cara. That last line sizzles. I think restraint can be as sexy as passionate tussling, so I loved this. Really built up tension for the moment they do enter her suite!

  16. felt like I was right there in the elevator! way to amp up the tension 😉

  17. J.C. Martin says:

    Cheeky. 🙂 Great build-up to a fun scene, I’m sure.

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