Six Sentence Sunday Oct. 7


Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday

Every week participants post six sentences from something they are writing – or have written. It’s a lot of fun and really a great way to meet new writers!

And I’ve met some terrific people. Thank you !

Be sure to check out the other great participants and thanks so much for stopping by.

And Happy Turkey day in Canada 😀

The Misfits is a group of four couples, consisting of four who work as part of the mid-management team for the devil, Mr.D, as soul collectors, and their partners, who are human.

Today we  meet Eve. The scene takes place before she met Victor.

Sometimes Eve hated trucking, it meant driving in the dark, or in the hours before the sky blossomed into the reds, oranges and purples of dawn, just her and the load at the back of the vehicle.

Even with heavy traffic she felt isolated, as if the world consisted of a woman encased in a metal shell, not human at all.

When she had been in school she considered herself dumb; there was the geek clique, the pretty girls clique, the smart kids clique.

She wasn’t a geek, she didn’t think she was smart, her grades were usually in the C range, and she wasn’t considered pretty.

Perhaps her thoughts about trucking reflected her feelings about herself.

As she aged, now at close to thirty, she  still did not regard herself as attractive, not with her smart mouth to cover up her lingering school girl shyness, and nil fashion sense: jeans, leather jacket, t-shirt, trucking clothes; but at least she didn’t do the hat thing like the guys did.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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35 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday Oct. 7

  1. Heather Boyd says:

    The lack of hat makes all the difference. LOL Great description today.

  2. Carrie Crain says:

    Her loneliness and isolation and unhappiness is a good set-up. I sense there will be a striking change occurring soon in the story!

  3. Jenna Jaxon says:

    “As if the world consisted of a woman encased in a metal shell, not human at all.” Fabulous description of loneliness and isolation. Poor Eve! But fortunately it seems that her circumstances are about to change. Great snippet!

  4. Gemma Parkes says:

    She sounds interesting, l love the characterisation here!

  5. Cara Bristol says:

    “Even with heavy traffic she felt isolated, as if the world consisted of a woman encased in a metal shell, not human at all.” Great line!

    As she aged, now close to thirty? Ha ha ha . Oh to be 30 again!

  6. I love the description of her in the metal casing on the road. Very descriptive and this really gives us a good look at her characterization. She’s automatically familiar and easy to identify with.

  7. I can feel how lonely she is but maybe something is coming her way. Great SIX SENTENCE and can’t wait until next week.

  8. Elin Gregory says:

    LOL the hat thing! Long distance truck driving must give you a lot of time to think – not always a good thing.

  9. Wonderful character insight….very curious to see if your opinion of herself changes as the story unfolds.

  10. Vivien Dean says:

    Love the insight into her, though I can think of a lot of guys who’d be into girls in jeans and leather jackets, lol.

  11. Really like how you captured the loneliness of endless driving alone and compared it to her personality. I remember her giggles with Victor from a previous six. Hope we get to see how they meet! 🙂

  12. Dana Mason says:

    Love the bit about the hat. Truckers hats are awful. Nice six. I love everything about it, from self consciousness over her our appearance, to the loneliness in a metal shell.

  13. Sounds like she’s a pretty deep character. Love it!

  14. Oh, I really feel for her. Great six!

  15. This is really intriguing — I love the direction of her thoughts, and how they seem to result from her isolation. Wonderful description too. 🙂

  16. Loved her self-assessment! The hat line is a great way to end the six! Made me smile. 🙂

  17. Sounds like a girl after my own heart. Can’t wait to see more of her!

  18. J.A. Beard says:

    Definitely a character that seems ripe for a character arc.

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