Six Haiku for Blogophilia 48.5

When her faith had died

she hoped he would not fail her

but as time went on


their life continued 

his voice like a trumpet’s blare

sent out warning notes


her heart drummed loudly

she wondered if he was true

one more chance she gave


watchful eyes waited

she sensed his interest fade

taut violin strings


time passed so slowly

his flute shrilled piercing her soul

powerless she wept


luck found her at last

The time had come to leave him

when her faith had died


written for

Blogophilia Week 48.5 topic: Where Faith Dies, There is Always Hope

Bonus Points:

(Hard, 2pts):Use the same sentence as a first and last line

(Easy, 1pt):Include 2 musical instruments

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23 Responses to Six Haiku for Blogophilia 48.5

  1. Six verse Hakai. Nice tension on the final stanza lines. .

    • Sue says:

      I had no idea what to do this week. And I dislike rhyming – after I spoke to a friend I based my blog on her situation. I hope if she sees this she won’t be mad…

  2. bluerose says:

    awww… no way am I mad – it’s beautiful!
    I love the part about his voice like a trumpet sounded out warnings.
    “When her faith had died” is so appropriate in so many ways.
    Thank you for this.

  3. Marvin says:

    Wow! Haikus filled with an orchestra! so many instruments you used! 8 points Earthling! 🙂

  4. Chuck says:

    A sad story, gritty and real. Can only hope for better.

  5. PoppySilver says:

    So moving and a beautiful form!

  6. Magnificent, and your haikus paint a picture of a sad situation, such heartbreak. Sometimes we must nearly drown in emotion before we make necessary changes! Well done! 😉

  7. Michelle King says:

    I love haiku and you did very well with the prompts. Beautifully sad!

    Michelle K

  8. trev says:

    very passionate indeed Sue… a lot of heart wrenching indeed… relationships are hard to chisel into your life… faith being the mainstay for many of us girl…. beautiful Haiku Sue… very thought provoking indeed … a great picture too… love it Sue… xxx

  9. DJS says:

    I just love haiku’s. This was a great set of haiku’s.


  10. Very nice 🙂 I love how you told a story through them, rather than having 6 stand alone haikus

  11. Liam says:

    nice flow

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