Six Haiku for Blogophilia 48.5


When her faith had died

she hoped he would not fail her

but as time went on

**

their life continued 

his voice like a trumpet’s blare

sent out warning notes

**

her heart drummed loudly

she wondered if he was true

one more chance she gave

**

watchful eyes waited

she sensed his interest fade

taut violin strings

**

time passed so slowly

his flute shrilled piercing her soul

powerless she wept

**

luck found her at last

The time had come to leave him

when her faith had died

**

written for

Blogophilia Week 48.5 topic: Where Faith Dies, There is Always Hope

Bonus Points:

(Hard, 2pts):Use the same sentence as a first and last line

(Easy, 1pt):Include 2 musical instruments

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23 Responses to Six Haiku for Blogophilia 48.5

  1. Six verse Hakai. Nice tension on the final stanza lines. .

    • Sue says:

      I had no idea what to do this week. And I dislike rhyming – after I spoke to a friend I based my blog on her situation. I hope if she sees this she won’t be mad…

  2. bluerose says:

    awww… no way am I mad – it’s beautiful!
    I love the part about his voice like a trumpet sounded out warnings.
    “When her faith had died” is so appropriate in so many ways.
    Thank you for this.

  3. Marvin says:

    Wow! Haikus filled with an orchestra! so many instruments you used! 8 points Earthling! 🙂

  4. Chuck says:

    A sad story, gritty and real. Can only hope for better.

  5. PoppySilver says:

    So moving and a beautiful form!

  6. Magnificent, and your haikus paint a picture of a sad situation, such heartbreak. Sometimes we must nearly drown in emotion before we make necessary changes! Well done! 😉

  7. Michelle King says:

    I love haiku and you did very well with the prompts. Beautifully sad!

    Michelle K

  8. trev says:

    very passionate indeed Sue… a lot of heart wrenching indeed… relationships are hard to chisel into your life… faith being the mainstay for many of us girl…. beautiful Haiku Sue… very thought provoking indeed … a great picture too… love it Sue… xxx

  9. DJS says:

    I just love haiku’s. This was a great set of haiku’s.

    –Diana

  10. Very nice 🙂 I love how you told a story through them, rather than having 6 stand alone haikus

  11. Liam says:

    nice flow

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