WeWriWa – Quinn


 

Happy Sunday!

We’ve met the four teens  from my current fantasy, coming of age WIP and learned they are good looking, smart with a love of fun and adventure.

Quinn is Stone’s girlfriend and I’m fudging the sentence structure here trying to get the paragraph into 8 sentences.

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Naturally in his opinion Quinn was the more appealing— he couldn’t remember a time when he thought differently— though Vonny, with her golden-brown hair and hazel eyes also received her share of wolf whistles from construction workers;  however she was more likely to give the guys the finger than to ignore them.

Most of the girls called Kelly, shorter than Stone’s six feet, with  whiskey coloured eyes, a real ‘cutie’.

As the group headed toward their favourite picnic table, Stone’s peripheral vision picked up two older boys staring at Quinn.

He turned his head and smirked back at them, she’s mine, then glanced at his girlfriend who had let go of his hand to catch up to Vonny, no doubt to finish their conversation regarding the war of 1812; they were both history buffs.

Quinn never acknowledged her followers; he wasn’t even sure she noticed them. Males watching Quinn was a regular occurrence. Stone understood why of course.  With her blonde- red hair, blue- green eyes and shapely curves, she was impossible to disregard; she must have felt his gaze since she looked back over her shoulder and grinned.

 

 

 

 

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32 Responses to WeWriWa – Quinn

  1. I love how you used the situation to reveal the differences in the girl’s personalities and the way they deal with situations. It’s a very clever snippet.

  2. Gemma Parkes says:

    Love your descriptions of the girls and Stone’s response to the predatory males.

  3. Definitely well done and I agree with both Jess and Gemma – nice way of providing character reveal within the context of the storyline. Good job.

  4. I’m liking all the characters already. Can’t wait to find out more about them.

  5. What a nice snippet this morning 🙂

  6. S. J. Maylee says:

    These descriptions pulled me right into wanting more from this story. Very intriguing.

  7. I enjoy this group but I’m a little on edge, waiting for the conflict – because I don’t want anything bad happening to them LOL! But it must or there’s no story, right?…excellent excerpt.

  8. Sue says:

    Yeah sorry about that.I need all the hep I can get with this and there’s a lot of necessary introduction. maybe next week I’ll see if I can skip a bit without losing anything. I’m still writing this and it’s a slow go due to time considerations

  9. ldsmith1818 says:

    Excellent description and i love the way you set it up with the last sentence, leaving me wondering what will happen next!

  10. Nice character development through dialogue – and the names are strong and unique!

  11. I liked seeing Stone’s view of how different the girls are, and why he thinks his is the best. Nice insider info via his thoughts rather than an info dump.

    History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders

  12. Nice introduction to your characters.

  13. Cara Bristol says:

    Nice, distinctly different characters.

  14. Nice intro to the characters. Good 8.

  15. Nice way to reveal character descriptions in a short snippet!

  16. Stone seems proud to have Quinn as a girlfriend. Good guy!

  17. This gives the reader a good idea of the different characters without info-dumping. Nicely done.

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