WeWriWa – Stone’s Rant


 

Happy Sunday! and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Just click the link and enjoy the participating authors.

Getting home sometime today so will be late with comments.

Still in the park but skipping a few lines. So far the 4 teens have been enjoying themselves with a free hour in the park and eating their treats.

What happened to Robert and Charlotte you ask?

***

“That was interesting,” Stone commented. 

Vonny sat on a spot of grass while Quinn and Kelly stood close by eating their rapidly melting gelato. 

They  raised their brows questioningly.

 “Robert’s reaction to the new girl. He usually slouches in his seat and barely pays attention to anything a teacher says. When Charlotte smiled at him he straightened up, gave her as pleasant a look as I’ve ever seen on him, turned toward Ms Simmons, and seemed to actually listen.”

My cousin Robert is such a jerk!  He should shoot down his mother’s helicopter, grow a pair of balls and man-up.  

 

 

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14 Responses to WeWriWa – Stone’s Rant

  1. J.A. Beard says:

    Insight all around.

  2. S. J. Maylee says:

    Nice twist on the helicopter mom. Gosh, I hope I’m not one of those, lol. Interesting show of character.

  3. The last sentence is *priceless* LOL. Another excellent excerpt from this story…

  4. Hi, Sue
    More nice development of the characters and I have to agree with the above comments – love the helicopter mom line. Good job.

  5. Nice 8, and I agree that we learned a lot about the characters today. I love the helicopter mom line.

  6. Marcia says:

    Yes indeed, this excerpt is very revealing! Yet we still have some questions which is nice, because it gives us reasons to keep reading. Thanks for sharing!

  7. lol loved the excerpt.

  8. Ann Swann says:

    Hah! Love the helicopter line…

  9. Interesting dynamic! Love the reaction in the last two lines!

  10. haha! Love the last lines! Shows a lot about the character! Nice 8 🙂

  11. Jenna Jaxon says:

    Great character development here. And yes, great helicopter mom line! Great job!

  12. Wow someone doesn’t seem to like Robert much.

  13. Love that you referenced the helicopter mom. Adds a nice detail of realism.

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