Happy Hump Day. I’m continuing with my new fantasy, coming of age WIP. To read the participating authors click on the link.
Gladstone Thomas and his group of three, friends since birth, know exactly what awaits them when they turn eighteen. Stone’s cousin, Robert Ward, owing to his helicopter mother, Sara, is unaware of his future. Meeting Charlotte, the new girl at school, is a life changer. Gladstone and his buddies are witness to Robert’s transformation from an indifferent student, careless dresser and narcissistic personality to a young man who accepts his responsibility, even if he has to convince his mother it’s the right thing to do Once Stone learns the key position Robert will play, they must work together to ensure success.
The first line is Stone’s internal thought from last week. And he’s the first speaker.
My cousin Robert is such a jerk! He should shoot down his mother’s helicopter, grow a pair of balls and man-up.
“My Aunt Sara and uncle Toby aren’t raising Robert the way our parents are teaching us. Well Sara for sure, sometimes I think Toby doesn’t agree with her parenting methods.”
He recognized his tone of disgust. But it didn’t matter and anyway they’d talked about Robert many times.
“Like what?” Kelly encouraged him, in between licks of his ice-cream cone. Kelly was the kind of friend that even though he’d heard it all before he knew Stone needed to vent.
“Well remember when we were ten and the two weeks we spent at the lake? Robert was with us too. I have no idea why.”
Vonny stood, wandered over to the dust bin and tossed in her paper napkin, speaking as she did so. ”Yeah. I remember we walked into town.”
“Bloody long walk. Good thing we got a drive home.” Quinn added.
“Well we hitch hiked and got back after dark. Now do you remember?” Stone prodded their memories. He took a sip of his juice holding the tin so tightly that he almost dented it.
Hmm, makes me curious as to what happened when they hitch-hiked. Nice hook!
it’s what happened after
Would like to find out more about the memories. Good hook
you will 😀
They must be some memories given the way he’s holding his tin of juice! Ominous ending.
stay tuned – thanks for the visit
omg, great opening line! 🙂
if it made you laugh my work is done 😀
Like the ending with the juice…makes me think something really bad happened. Great hook.
thanks – not so bad but the information will be important for later
Fab hook, well done!
Curious to see where this is heading… I like these peeps…xx
I’m glad you like my people 😀 I’m taking it slow and it will be a curvy road
Nice hook. Will be back next week.
I look forward to it
I just loved this. Such good dialogue, nice hook. Very interested to read more x
thank you re: the dialogue – I never know what will work
Oh, I get the feeling something rather dark happened on that walk. Great excerpt! I hope we see more of this one 🙂