WeWriWa – Cousin Robert


 

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Blurb

Gladstone Thomas and his group of three, friends since birth, know exactly what awaits them when they turn eighteen. Stone’s cousin, Robert Ward, owing to his helicopter mother, Sara, is unaware of his future. Meeting Charlotte, the new girl at school, is a life changer.  Gladstone and his buddies  are witness to Robert’s  transformation  from  an  indifferent student, careless dresser and  narcissistic personality to a young man who accepts his responsibility, even if he has to convince his mother it’s the right thing to do     Once Stone learns the key position Robert will play, they must work together to ensure success.

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I didn’t make it here last week but the four kids are still in the park, eating ice cream and hanging out. The first speaker is Stone.

“My Aunt Sara and Uncle Toby aren’t raising Robert the way our parents are teaching us, and  sometimes I think Toby doesn’t agree with her parenting methods either.”

 “Like what?”

Kelly encouraged him, in between licks of his ice-cream cone; he was the kind of friend that even though he’d heard it all before he knew Stone needed to vent.

“Well remember when we were ten and the two weeks we spent at the lake, for some reason Robert was with us too.”

Vonny stood, wandered over walked to the dust bin and tossed  in her paper napkin, speaking as she did so, ”Yeah, I remember we walked into town.”

“Bloody long walk and a good thing we got a drive home,” Quinn added.

“Well we hitch hiked and got back after dark, now do you remember?”

Stone  took a sip of his juice holding the tin so tightly that he almost dented it.

 

 

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20 Responses to WeWriWa – Cousin Robert

  1. Interesting conversation – wonder where it is going or what is coming next.
    [Should Uncle be capitalized like Aunt was in the 1st para?]

  2. Hum I wonder what Robert did that day.

  3. Gemma Parkes says:

    Great conversation, the last line is powerful and throws up all kinds of questions.

  4. Obviously there’s a lot to this story, can’t wait to hear more.I’m with Gemma – that last line is a good one. Great snippet!

  5. S. J. Maylee says:

    Interesting. I need to know why Stone is holding his tin so tightly.

  6. ldsmith1818 says:

    Nice snippet! I like the subtle set up and the way you’ve really built up the characters personalities.

  7. burnsmillie says:

    Last line is solid. Like others, makes me wonder what Robert did to tick off his cousin.

  8. You’ve got a good sense of movement going on in the scene – the characters aren’t just sitting around talking. And as everyone else said – you’re last line conveys the most. Lots of info in those few words.

  9. That’s an intense reaction. Something’s up.

  10. I think it’s so fantastic how you piece together their dialogue and little details to fill the reader in on these characters and their background.

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