Hump Day Hook – – Altercation


Happy Hump Day.  I’m continuing with my new fantasy, coming of age WIP. To read the participating authors click on the link.

Happy Canada Day! Happy Independence Day!


This snippet is actually an outtake since I’m not sure where in the story it’ll fit in.


Stone imagined that the colour of the  lockers lining the hallway  resembled a Martian with the flu. The smell of moldy socks and sandwiches left too long un-refrigerated soured the air. High pitched voices at the other end of the corridor caused him and Quinn to turn away from collecting their books for the next class  toward the commotion.

The couple edged closer to Vonny and Kelly to better hear what was going on. Their friends  had been confronted by four boys who were heckling them in annoying and sing-song tones.

“Hey Vonny, what’re you doing with Kelly? He’s shorter than you and looks like a geek. Bet his pecker is short too.” The chubby boy in a too tight, red T shirt pranced before her; his mid-section prominently displayed an overflow of skin.

Why don’t you get yourself a real man,” said another boy, burly with a brush cut, as he reached out to grab her.

Vonny side stepped to the right then immediately returned to her original stance, knees slightly bent, one leg in front of the other and  arms loosely at her sides; she leaned forward.

A third boy, not as tall as Kelly with a basketball stomach, called out, “Yeah the jerk isn’t even protecting you. He’s just standing there like a statue.”

Kelly slouched next to Vonny. His book bag sat  on the floor behind him,  hands in the pockets of  his jeans, boot clad feet steady, ready for action, if necessary, assessing  the group of students facing him.

Stone could see the glint of amusement in Kelly’s whiskey coloured   eyes, and guessed he didn’t consider the small mob as aggressive and taunting as they pictured themselves. 

Quinn whispered, and pointed to the overweight kid, “That one  thinks he’s hot shit just ‘cause he’s part of the gang.” Stone nodded in agreement, a small smile played on his mouth as he watched his friends.

Vonny’s narrow eyes roved around the cluster of boys watching carefully. The tallest and thinnest one wearing baggy jeans and a shirt that hung to his knees strode right up to her and attempted to seize her long light brown hair.

Stone and Quinn uttered, “Uh oh,” simultaneously as…



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17 Responses to Hump Day Hook – – Altercation

  1. I LOVE the name Stone by the way 😉


  2. Trevor Clower says:

    funny how strikingly different our school days are when we look back and being in England as apposed to the states… but I did identify everything Sue, from watching Grease,, the film, not the oil leak under my car!.. LOL… Great descrition girl… you could see how the male peacocks rose their plooms to advitise there manhood… brilliant story Sue…loved it xxx

  3. Jessica Subject says:

    As what? LOL Great hook!

  4. I eapecially love the ‘soured the air’ line 🙂 nice descriptions, Sue!

  5. Hehe, great hook, well done.

  6. so if it’s an outake do we get to read the rest? 😉

  7. Aww, you left us hanging. Very nice hook.

  8. Moldy sock and sandwiches left too long. Love that!

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