WeWriWa – Drabble


 

Hello Warriors!

I haven’t been around for any number of reasons. I’ve decided to post a drabble this week. A drabble is an extremely short work of fiction of exactly one hundred words in length not necessarily including the title. The purpose of the drabble is brevity, testing the author’s ability to express interesting and meaningful ideas in an extremely confined space. This one is 104 words including the prompt.

Have you tried to drabble?

 

 

It was nearly morning.

The three girls knew the night of fun would end at sun’s rise. The curly haired blonde with the face of porcelain and blue dress cried. “Oh I don’t want it to be over.”

The dark haired girl in the red dress and white apron scolded, “We will yet have another night to play.”

The red haired girl in the gold evening gown said, “I wish we could sing and dance all the time.”

The three girls, feeling the first rays of the new day, climbed onto the white shelves.

Emily would wake soon and would look for her dolls.

 

 

 

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21 Responses to WeWriWa – Drabble

  1. Awesome, I like the conclusion of this story. I could feel the dolls excitement.

  2. S. J. Maylee says:

    Nicely done. Love the suns part in it all. I do flash fiction almost every week. it’s a fabulous exercise.

  3. Elaine says:

    I loved your drabble. This was not what I was expecting, I didn’t see the end coming until just before you revealed the twist.

  4. Karysa Faire says:

    That’s fabulous! Love how you described each doll by their hair and what they’re wearing. That’s exactly how someone describes dolls. 🙂

  5. Very clever and fun! Enjoyed this so much…excellent drabble!

  6. LOL. At first I thought maybe they were vampires. Nice drabble.

  7. Gemma Parkes says:

    Great fun, love your descriptions of the dolls!

  8. You have posted this before for blogophilia :p I still like it!

  9. burnsmillie says:

    Fun little drabble. I love Flash Fiction. It is an exceptional exercise to make every word count! I was thinking they were either vampires…or as the descriptions continued…dolls : ) Loved it!

  10. VR Barkowski says:

    I really love this drabble, Sue, and I’ll tell you why. It’s amazing how you’ve given each doll a personality with so few words to work with. The blonde girl is pouty, the dark haired girl is practical, the red haired girl is wistful. This isn’t just a list of pretty adjectives and adverbs, you’ve shown us who these “girls” are via bits of dialogue. Add the surprise ending, and you’ve told a complete story with interesting characters and haven’t wasted a single word.

    VR Barkowski

  11. Sue says:

    You’re the best 😀

  12. Gem Sivad says:

    Great precision writing!

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