WeWriWa – Nov 24


 

Happy Sunday! and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Just click the link and enjoy the participating authors.

And Happy Thanksgiving to you Yanks out there 😀

Carrying on with Nineteen Hundred  my Victorian short story, It’s the morning of January 1, 1900.

Kathryn decided to explore the neighbourhood around the boarding house where she lives.

 

***

It’s so still.  

The street normally frenzied with activity– horses’ hooves clumping on the cobbles, pulling carriages of people or produce headed for market, the yelling of cabbies, the shrill voices of venders hawking apples, ribbons, or any number of items one might need or want– was now as  quiet as a secluded country lane.

Thinking she was alone, Mr. Thomas’ approach startled her.

“Miss St. Clair, a pleasure to see you again.  I trust you passed a pleasant night.”

“Yes, thank you, I slept very well. My, you’ve been out early.”

She noticed a hint of mud on his otherwise impeccable black boots, demonstrating he had been outdoors for a while. How odd.

 ***

Note:

 If anyone uses the three act screen writing method for their novels could you please get in touch with me? Having an awful time with the “crash” ending for Part I. Thank you

 

 

 

 

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14 Responses to WeWriWa – Nov 24

  1. Charming and descriptive. I could see the scene so well. And then the man. The plot thickens. Well done eight!

  2. Interesting that she finds it odd he’s been out for a while already…intriguing excerpt!

  3. Sarah Cass says:

    Hmmm, how intriguing. Makes you wonder where he’d been. Still, I look forward to their interactions!!

  4. Millie Burns says:

    Well, wonder what he’s been doing? Maybe she’ll find out : )

  5. Cara Bristol says:

    Your descriptions set the scene so well.

  6. Nice description of an early morning scene, but can I make one suggestion? In paragraph 3 change the second half to “she was startled by….” Otherwise it sounds like the approach was thinking.

  7. Love the description in the first paragraph. It painted a picture for me. Not overdone but just enough for me to visualize it easily in side my own mind. Good job.

    Considering the time frame, would mud on his boots be odd? And I wonder what he is up to?
    History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders.

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