The Rescue for Blogophilia 8.7


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Me and Steve were just hanging around. No school for us, both kicked out.

The bridge was old, crumbling and rusted. What little of it survived the conflagration two years ago so I placed my feet on what solid footing I could find. Didn’t wanna get thrown into the river beneath.

I glanced at Steve to see if he had found anything interesting. “What’s that red thing down below?” A feeling of apprehension hooked me in the gut.

“Geeze it’s a kid. The current is pulling him under.”

“He’s too little to over power it and it looks like  his big rubber ball bobbing in the other direction.”

“He musta tripped and fell.”

“Yep the end of the pier probably collapsed.”

We were good swimmers so we jumped into the water. Man it was cold.

Steve captured the kid, gripping the boy by his coat. We managed to haul him to dry land.

“James, are you okay?” Are you okay James?”

I coughed up sludge and slime grimacing at the sour taste of the filthy liquid. “Yeah I’ll live.”

Steve called 911. While we waited for the ambulance we leaned against the abutment and caught our breath. The child sat on the ground matching me cough for cough. He would be fine.

 

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Written for
Blogophilia Week 8.7 Topic: Hooked on a Feeling
Bonus Points:
(Hard, 2 points) Incorporate echolalia (echo-like repetition of another’s words)
(Easy, 1 point) Include a conflagration
 

 

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22 Responses to The Rescue for Blogophilia 8.7

  1. Tyler/Chuck says:

    I guess being kicked out of school wasn’t a bad thing on this day

  2. Marvin Martian says:

    Awesome saving!! 8 hero points, Earthling!! 😀

  3. Dave says:

    There is a reason for every action. Very interesting write!

  4. BarbaraK aka fiddlbarb says:

    As though I’m right there experiencing it all first-hand as I read. I love it. Great storytelling!

  5. Nice story 🙂
    I did feel they talked a little too long before actually jumping in the water to save the kid.

  6. The fates aligned… a child was saved! Everything happens for a reason. Your flash fiction is always top notch, Sue. This one was really fantastic! Not a word wasted, very powerful.

  7. Steven Clark says:

    Very nice! Is this another short story challenge (aside from Blogo)?

  8. irene says:

    That was a close one! You do these short stories so well.

  9. Doris Emmett says:

    Loved the write…agree with Colleen…powerful writing…in the blink of an eye…but he was saved ❤

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