The Visit

Couldn’t resist trying this challenge again.


Answer the question – Have all your clocks stopped?

in 42 words exactly

I sensed a change in the air, a tranquility.

“Hello Susan.” The rocking chair stirred.

“Bob is that you?” After forty years we spoke. I didn’t ask how.

At the end of the visit the grandfather clock in the living room chimed.


Bob was my boy friend killed in Viet Nam




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36 Responses to The Visit

  1. cshowers says:

    Wow. I could tell as I read it, before seeing who Bob was, that this was very personal to you. The emotion you conveyed in those few words was palpable. I pray you see Bob again one day.


  2. shailajav says:

    Powerful piece. I sympathise with your pain. I hope you get to see Bob in your dreams again, happy, healthy and loving.

    Shailaja’s post

  3. mridubala says:

    That’s touching. Sorry for your loss.

  4. Marcy says:

    I liked the change in the air. That set it up well for what was to come.

  5. M. L. Sexton says:

    Very touching, but glad that there was one last communication, if only for a moment.

  6. This made me feel very sad. A powerful piece.

  7. djmatticus says:

    If only we had a way to harness these moments… I wouldn’t mind a few stolen minutes with those I’ve lost.

  8. Kir Piccini says:

    I have always said that I wish I could live two lives, in two places..where time stands still in one and I can be in that moment with the people I love, the people I lost, the moments that changed me.

    what a personal, thoughtful take on the prompt. It was really lovely.

  9. Powerful, immediately reminded me of a particular song dear to me.

  10. Lance says:

    Thank you for letting me read this. It’s sad and powerful for the right reasons. Well done.

  11. trev says:

    there is great comfort in the words Old Father Time ….
    For you Sue it maybe a place where you know you can find Bob whenever you want to talk…
    Who knows how somethings happen girl… we can only accept it and not question it…
    I’m pleased you have a comfort zone Sue…
    Your words here makes me think we all walk amongst giants beyond our understanding.. xxx

  12. whimsygizmo says:

    Awww. Love this visit. Condolences. Some pain barely fades, for sure.

  13. Gina says:

    Oh boy! Hauntingly bittersweet.

  14. Sarah Ann says:

    Ethereal and haunting in a comforting way. Stirring rocking chairs aren’t always so innocent.

  15. Christine says:

    Beautiful opening line to a sweet, nostalgic piece. Nice job! Thanks for linking up to the gargleblaster again!

  16. Sue says:

    Definitely my pleasure – you’re a wonderful group

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