A poem in 42 words
I needed you that day,and begged for you to stay.
But as usual you walked away,
tossed me off like an old baseball cap.
I will not beg again.
You broke my heart.
Far too many scattered pieces,
wounded beyond repair.
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sassyspeaks 
You know what I love? That third line- It breaks the flowing rhyme of the first two lines- ‘threw me off like an old baseball cap’. That abrupt break talks about the shattering of hope. So effective. By the way, did you like my new blog? Thanks for visiting earlier 🙂
thank you for the lovely comment – was not my intention but glad you pointed it out
“tossed me off like an old baseball cap.” Great visual image!
thank you –
Love the imagery….and “I will not beg again” tells so much of the back story! Powerful.
yes indeed – quite the back story in this – I’ve written it in various forms over time
Love the strength in the line “I will not beg again” – and the imagery of the baseball cap is fantastic.
thank you – it took a long time to get that strong
Great writing and perfect imagery. Nice job!
thanks so much
Great story in so few words.
thanks for awesome comment
No one is worth begging for. Great capture of emotion here.
thank you 😀
“I will not beg again.” Very powerful.
thank you
Beautiful…been there, done that. In a way. Loved it!
did you get the T shirt?
to be left hanging like that.. all alone with no one but yourself to sort things out …
they say it builds character and strength in one’s own abilities and self belief Sue…
but such experiences can make one hard and unapproachable and singular, that sometimes is the downside of being so self confident I feel…
you certainly know how to push my buttons Sue… 🙂 … in just a few words and I want to write a novel about it… LOL… brilliant write, full of emotion, pain and anger… loved it girl… 🙂
no one can do it on their own. thanks for the visit
Yeah, being tossed off like an old baseball cap, that’ll do it. Perfectly expressed!
lol – thank you
This poem is loaded with anger and pain. I agree about the baseball cap – it’s a great image, very tangible. Nice response to the question. Thanks for linking it up!
yeah the anger and pain is still with me
It’s so evocative…”wounded beyond repair.” Indeed, one cannot, as they say, “unscramble an egg.” Thanks for sharing this, it’s very powerful.
I like that egg phrase – thank you
🙂