Yea! It’s Sunday and time for Six Sentence Sunday
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From the Devil’s Mistress. This scene takes place after they’ve been seeing each other about a month. While she had vowed to help him regain his humanity, sometimes his job just gets to her.
We had our first fight the other night.
I got really nasty and angry, I just wanted to hit him, and I did.
“There’s no point in me trying to help you regain your humanity. It’s not gonna happen.”
He smells emotions which means there’s not much I can hide from him; he likes to say, “The nose knows.” I am not amused.
“I’ll never get used to the awful scent of rotten eggs, which is what your anger and frustration smells like to me. It oozes from your body and I would do anything to make it go away.”
The Devil’s Mistress, a paranormal romance, is about an unlucky in love woman and a man who works in mid-management for the Devil. He’s the one who dispatches souls to his boss, Mr. D. She vows to restore her lover’s humanity and not lose him in the process. The story is told entirely from her point of view.
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I love the tension and the way this six works. The tense and the use of POV is great. Well done.
thank you very much Denny – really apprciate it
Nice correlation between bad smells and emotions.
wait til next week – it gets stinkier!
Great show of emotion. Can’t wait to read more. 🙂
and so you shall – thank you
Wow! Loved the last line – he gets the upper hand right away with that!
he does? or she does? I hadn’t thought of it that way – thank you
Interesting six.
thank you
I don’t know if I would appreciate being told I smelled of rotten eggs. Interesting ability.
that’s the point. He wants to make the smell go away
Loved this snippet! I feel bad for both of them. What frustration! Great job!
that’s so good of you 😀 to feel badly for both – thank you
Oh, kinda gross LOL. Love your six.
yeah kinda gross – supposed to be lol
Hm, wonder what he has in mind? 🙂 Love this snippet.
He just wants to make it better 😀
Rotten egg smell and emotion. Love the combination
thank you 😀
He’s in a bad way. A devil’s minion with a heart that’s ready to break. Wow. Love it!
and I love your comment!
Ah yes … the nose knows. 🙂
Always…
I like how you’ve related the scents and emotions. I’m sure anyone would want to get rid of that smell. Nice six!
yep – they both do – thank you
It’s interesting he takes responsibility in this scene, I’m curious to see what he can do to make it better. Suspenseful six!
use your imagination…..
Hi, Sue!
I like the idea of them fighting over this… I mean, it’s kind of a big deal… not just an argument about leaving the seat up in the bathroom…
couple things:
“…It’s not going to happen.” I’d love if you could be a bit more specific, like, what exactly set her off? ‘Cause she thinks he truly doesn’t want to change? ‘Cause he just did something devil-like? ‘Cause he left dinner half-way through the night ’cause the devil called?
Also, your second to last paragraph suddenly switched into present tense and I found that a little distracting 🙂
Such fun characters 🙂
I only have six sentences to play with !
I love that he can smell her emotions! that is such a fun idea! 😀 awesome!
they are fun!
Hi, Sue! Thanks for stopping by yesterday. Sorry I didn’t get a chance to check out your six till now. I love the whole concept! The only thing that I could nitpick would be your main character’s line here: “There’s no point in me trying to help you regain your humanity. It’s not gonna happen.”
I feel like most people wouldn’t state that in such a way–it almost doesn’t seem conversational. But like you said earlier–you only have six sentences to work with and sometimes you gotta say what you gotta say to get the point across. I’ll definitely be looking next week for more!
thank you – and thanks for the comment. It wasn’t conversational, she is angry
Love the description of how her anger smells!!!
Yeah she sure was stinky 😀
I really like the idea of smelling her emotions.
thank you 🙂