Alone for Blogophilia 45.6

Photo by Susan Koenig

Photo by Susan Koenig

The water barely rippled as she entered.  Sure in its  footing, fate  accompanied her naked body.  Clouds meandered across the bright sky, the moon’s reflection danced in the calm water.

She had left the man’s bed after her whispered confession.  His face collapsed in grief.

“I will miss you.” He tenderly  replied in the stillness.

She made her way down the path strewn with autumn leaves, the colours dulled by shadows.  Foliage dangled from the young trees on the hill.

Pondering his doom her lover buried his cheeks in moist arms and soaked shirt cuffs. Until they met he  never believed in miracles.

Star light  governed the heavens as he followed the path dictated by destiny.

His angel, who he promised to guard in this life and the next.  He wouldn’t break his vow.

The water barely rippled as he entered to join her.


Written for
Blogophilia Week 45.6 Topic: Before The Last Leaf Falls*
Bonus suggestions:
(hard, 2 points) Quote Albert Einstein **
(easy, 1 point) include a guardian angel

 *The autumn leaves on the ground and the tree – before the last leaf falls

** “There are only two ways to live your life. One is as though nothing is a miracle. The other is as though everything is a miracle.”

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35 Responses to Alone for Blogophilia 45.6

  1. Bettie says:

    Love the ripper of this piece .. Yeah .. Happy year 🙂

  2. Irene says:

    Love it!

  3. Myke Todd says:

    You should get extra points for your use of “governed” in this piece. You are a word play magician… Not to be overlook, this is a powerful piece.

  4. trev says:

    you have such a mixture of feelings here Sue…
    all so vivid and separate, yet sitting around promises and duty…
    leading to a packed that must not be broken… Quite brilliant Sue… brilliant girl.. 🙂 xxx

  5. Marvin says:

    Chilling are the waters of life, cold are the waters of death. Unexpected twist at the end. I like it!
    May the new year bring you all you desire! 8 points Earthling! 🙂

  6. Chuck/tyler says:

    A lot of intensity – seem like there no reason for a night swim if he is still with her, but maybe she needs to know for sure

  7. Jenna Jaxon says:

    So emotional and devastating. But now I want to know the whole story. Your writing always sucks me right in, making me want more. Is there more to this?

  8. Beautiful photo, and great imagery! It reminds me of the fairytale of the man who happens upon a celestial maiden swimming, and hides her feathered cloak so she can’t fly back to heaven.

    Wonderful piece of writing to start off the new year, Sue!

  9. Your writer never ceases to amaze me…. this is chock full of emotion and intensity. Love that ending! 😉

  10. Ooops…. didn’t spell check…. should say “Your writing….” lol

  11. I re read this very thought provoking piece three times. I was struck by the many meanings I took from this….Double suicide for one! lol…but settled on the water…a rebirth! 🙂

    Excellent writing Susan!

  12. BarbaraK aka fiddlbarb says:

    Feeling the powerful emotions within each eloquent word. Such a gorgeous photo to accompany as well.

  13. Oh, this gives me chills.

  14. This is beautiful, Sue, and haunting! 🙂

  15. Well i got a suicide form this, but maybe I am wrong…

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