Well I’m told I can submit poetry on here. So while my new story is still percolating that’s what I will do.
Set up – In January we visited Egypt The Cinquain I wrote recently for a challenge a friend threw at me. The haiku was written as the river flowed before my eyes.
a photo given to us after the cruise. Was a great carriage ride but spouse had camera taking pics of old stuff while I wanted to catch the locals
Carriage
horses hooves clop
dark shades native attire
languages mingling dry air unscented
tourist
Cinquain
Cinquain is a short, usually unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines. It was developed by the Imagist poet, Adelaide Crapsey. Another form, sometimes used by school teachers to teach grammar, is as follows:
Line 1: Noun
Line 2: Description of Noun
Line 3: Action
Line 4: Feeling or Effect
Line 5: Synonym of the initial noun.
I tried to follow this form but not too successful.
Cruise on the Nile
Haiku (5,7, 5 syllables)
The Nile river flows
Birds swoop, sun shines on water
Good morning to you
sassyspeaks 
Nice. Enjoyed both poems.
thank you Cara – appreciate your reading
Enjoyed the poems and the photos!
Thank you – glad you did!
The haiku was very good! Perhaps the cinquain would work better with commas added to separate the phrases without breaking the pattern?
You may well be correct. You usually are. I’ll have to check the puncuation rules – I appreciate your visit
Your haiku was great. I can’t write poetry at all.
Perhaps but you write books, and prose can be poetry too 😀
The photos are both so interesting and I enjoyed the words too. Thank you, Sue.
Thank you for the visit 😀
Your Haiku is outstanding–even with respect to the third line being a bit detached from the first two! Wonderful. 🙂
it was morning and the river was greeting the new day
🙂 Lovely sentiment, Sue–and well-conveyed… unlike my first comment. 🙂 I meant that in classic Haiku, the last line is to be a bit removed from the first two, yet related. I think you’ve done such an amazing job of doing that! 🙂
thank you – sweet comment
I’m not a “poetry person,” but these two poems were very vivid for me. Especially the second one. Love the pictures!
Thanks Jenna – their first was is still a work in progress and I haven’t been able to meet with my writing partner to get her input.
Well I liked them. I thought they both reflected well the viewpoint of a tourist’s experience.
History Sleuth’s Writings
well we were tourists 😀
Nice Poems. Egypt sounds so exciting.
Hello thank you for the visit – I see you live in France – wow! No Egypt is not really exciting to tell the truth
Wow, I’ve never heard of that type of poetry before! Both were wonderful! 😀
thanks for the visit Karen – there are so many forms of poetry it’s mind boggling
I’m not a poetry person either, but I enjoyed both of these. Succinct and beautiful!
thanks Joyce. All writers are poets 😀
What a lovely way to create a memory of an adventure. 🙂 I’ve heard of cinquain, but didn’t know how it came about. Thanks for sharing your lovely poems, and pics, and knowledge!
Oh Donna – thank you – what a lovely comment 🙂
Great photos, Sue, and I really enjoyed the poetry. Truth is, I know little about poetry, but I do know something about words, and yours inspire lovely, evocative images of your journey.
VR Barkowski
Thanks Vi – you’re welcome to visit any time 😀
Sue, these are quite nice. It’s so lovely to see poetry at WeWriWa. I hope you’ll consider putting up more 🙂
Thanks for the comment on my poetry. But WWW is not a good fit. I’ll be participating with a story this week 😀
Intriguing take on both photos. Nicely done, Sue. 🙂
Thank you very much 😀
Sweet, Sue. I used to write tons of poetery but not so much any more. Very enjoyable.
I’ve always had trouble following a format with poetry, so I appreciate what you did here. I liked the wording you chose.
Interesting poems, enjoyable read.