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The Misfits is a group of four couples, consisting of four who work as part of the mid-management team for the devil, Mr.D, as soul collectors, and their partners, who are human.
Set up This is from chapter 4 the last one I drafted before starting NaNo where I hope to write the meat of the piece. It’s the evening of the first day Gideon and Phoebe met at an accident scene. Later he asked her out for dinner In Nineteen Hundred he had not told Kathryn what he was and dire consequences resulted.
Listening to Phoebe describe her dreams, his heart screeched to a halt, and the restaurant’s background noises faded.
When his heart proceeded to pump it boomed in his ears like a parade’s marching band.
Her visions appeared to be scenes out of Kathryn’s life: the fireworks on the night they met, New Years Eve 1899, after they played Whist, he wore a mustache in the last century, the dining room of the boarding house, the scent of flowers sounded consistent with Kathryn’s childhood room which she had mentioned to him and of course the horse…
Gideon did not know what to say, or do.
He felt uncomfortable, unwell, confused and bewildered; his clammy hands clutched the linen serviette in an attempt to dry them.
A minute later chills crawled up his spine. He shivered.
Nice show of his reaction! 🙂
Thank you!
Wonderful detail as far as his response to her visions. You’ve communicated his dread very well.
not sure dread is the right word. More like shock and wonderment 😀
Creepy. Is he going to tell her?
Creepy? Not supposed to be… He’ll mention it in another chapter
Hmmm. Intriguing scene that definitely pulls me in. More!
lol – glad it pulled you in. I’m writing most of it through NaNo
I gotta a creepy vibe about this too. It’s interesting and makes me curious for more! I’m so happy you’re doing NaNoWriMo!!
define “creepy”
Gave me shivers and completely pulled me in. Can’t wait to see what happens next. Great Six. 🙂
Shivers is good…
Wonderfully descriptive piece, l could really feel what he was feeling!
why thank you very much!
lol poor guy. Can’t wait to see where it’s going!
Poor guy 😀
Nice description of his emotional turmoil.
Much appreciated – thanks
His reaction evokes a whole host of feelings, a sense of eeriness, dread, as well as anticipation. Well done!
eerie yes, dread, not so much – shock mostly
Nice show. And interesting implication in Phoebe’s dream ‘memories’. Is he getting a second chance?
can’t fool you. thanks for the compliment and yes he is
This is very intriguing!
Intriguing is good…
Nice six! It made me wonder what will happen next.
You’re invited back next week 😀
Cool! Love where this is going!
I told you where it’s going lol
Having read Nineteen Hundred, I know what’s going on. Delicious in a spooky kind of way. I’m sure he’s shocked and suspects the truth. Great description of that, BTW. 🙂 Really nice to see the cool, calm Gideon upset. Adds new dimensions to his character.
Definitely intriguing. 🙂 And great description of his reactions. Looking forward to the next six!
Nice build up of tension and I loved her ‘visions’.
Lot’s of interesting things happening in this snippet. Great six.
Lots of good anticipatory tension there.
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